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优秀范例：Firstly, people need sturdy bodies by doing exercising, including swimming in the swimming pool or playing football on the playgrounds. To be healthy, people then can pursuit the enjoyment from the mental to appreciate art. Secondly, not all people enjoy art in fact, but all people need to do exercises. For those people who do not like art at all, they would seldom go to the art museums or music performance center. But if government builds recreational facilities, it benefits all citizens for providing places to exercise.
无老师中文翻译：首先，人们通过在游泳池游泳，或者在场地里踢足球这样的锻炼形式来获得强健的体魄。为了（心理）健康，人们还可以通过欣赏艺术品来获得精神上的愉悦。第二点，实际上并不是所有人都喜欢欣赏艺术，但是几乎所有人都需要锻炼身体。对于那些根本不喜欢艺术的人，他们几乎不回去艺术馆或者音乐厅。但是如果政府建一些娱乐设施，这将会为所有人民提供一个锻炼身体的地方。
无老师平庸范例：Firstly, Swimming in the swimming pool and playing football on the playgrounds may give people healthy body. To be healthy, enjoying the art may offer the mental pleasure. Secondly, not every one like the art, but everybody need the exercising. The people who are not favorable of the art barely enter the art museums or music performance center. However, if government builds recreational facilities, they may give the average people a place to take exercise.
无老师精析：哎，今天下手轻了一点点，因此你会感觉，优秀范例和平庸范例之间差别不熟很大。
优秀范例第1句Firstly, people need sturdy bodies by doing exercising, including swimming in the swimming pool or playing football on the playgrounds.对比平庸范例Firstly, Swimming in the swimming pool and playing football on the playgrounds may give people healthy body. 的优势是在于，用到了非谓语动词including，非谓语动词是中国考生很少涉猎的项目，但是咋爱英语里面十分常见，因此加分不少。除此之外优秀范例之中的sturdy“健壮的”也属上乘之作，美中不足是在于稍微有些冷门：P。
第2句 优秀范例写的是To be healthy, people then can pursuit the enjoyment from the mental to appreciate art.对比平庸范例To be healthy, enjoying the art may offer the mental pleasure.显然当我们想到“欣赏”的时候，enjoy是最为常见的选择，但是优秀范例里用到了appreciate，这样就不仅有“喜欢”这层含义，同时还包含了本身该有的“观摩、鉴赏”用词十分到位！然后优秀范例里的pursuit则是“追逐，追求”的意思，用在这里显示出词汇量的丰富。
第3句优秀范例告诉我们Secondly, not all people enjoy art in fact, but all people need to do exercises.平庸范例则说Secondly, not every one like the art, but everybody need the exercising.这里优秀范例的enjoy相比like会稍好一点。
第4句首先优秀范例说For those people who do not like art at all, they would seldom go to the art museums or music performance center.对比平庸范例The people who are not favorable of the art barely enter the art museums or music performance center.囧了！平庸范例写得更好。那就说说平庸范例为什么写得更好（囧啊！突然感觉逻辑性很差），平庸范例用到了固定搭配be favorable of写得不错（害羞ing），同时barely与seldom也是毫不逊色，因此，这里是平庸范例更好。
最后1句，优秀范例说But if government builds recreational facilities, it benefits all citizens for providing places to exercise.平庸范例反唇相讥However, if government builds recreational facilities, they may give the average people a place to take exercise.显然还是优秀范例的benefit，取本词的动词意思“有益于....”，而不是平时常见的名词意思，显示出用词的灵动性。因而胜出。
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优秀范例：Firstly, people need sturdy bodies by doing exercising, including swimming in the swimming pool or playing football on the playgrounds. To be healthy, people then can pursuit the enjoyment from the mental to appreciate art. Secondly, not all people enjoy art in fact, but all people need to do exercises. For those people who do not like art at all, they would seldom go to the art museums or music performance center. But if government builds recreational facilities, it benefits all citizens for providing places to exercise.
无老师中文翻译：首先，人们通过在游泳池游泳，或者在场地里踢足球这样的锻炼形式来获得强健的体魄。为了（心理）健康，人们还可以通过欣赏艺术品来获得精神上的愉悦。第二点，实际上并不是所有人都喜欢欣赏艺术，但是几乎所有人都需要锻炼身体。对于那些根本不喜欢艺术的人，他们几乎不回去艺术馆或者音乐厅。但是如果政府建一些娱乐设施，这将会为所有人民提供一个锻炼身体的地方。
无老师平庸范例：Firstly, Swimming in the swimming pool and playing football on the playgrounds may give people healthy body. To be healthy, enjoying the art may offer the mental pleasure. Secondly, not every one like the art, but everybody need the exercising. The people who are not favorable of the art barely enter the art museums or music performance center. However, if government builds recreational facilities, they may give the average people a place to take exercise.
无老师精析：哎，今天下手轻了一点点，因此你会感觉，优秀范例和平庸范例之间差别不熟很大。
优秀范例第1句Firstly, people need sturdy bodies by doing exercising, including swimming in the swimming pool or playing football on the playgrounds.对比平庸范例Firstly, Swimming in the swimming pool and playing football on the playgrounds may give people healthy body. 的优势是在于，用到了非谓语动词including，非谓语动词是中国考生很少涉猎的项目，但是咋爱英语里面十分常见，因此加分不少。除此之外优秀范例之中的sturdy“健壮的”也属上乘之作，美中不足是在于稍微有些冷门：P。
第2句 优秀范例写的是To be healthy, people then can pursuit the enjoyment from the mental to appreciate art.对比平庸范例To be healthy, enjoying the art may offer the mental pleasure.显然当我们想到“欣赏”的时候，enjoy是最为常见的选择，但是优秀范例里用到了appreciate，这样就不仅有“喜欢”这层含义，同时还包含了本身该有的“观摩、鉴赏”用词十分到位！然后优秀范例里的pursuit则是“追逐，追求”的意思，用在这里显示出词汇量的丰富。
第3句优秀范例告诉我们Secondly, not all people enjoy art in fact, but all people need to do exercises.平庸范例则说Secondly, not every one like the art, but everybody need the exercising.这里优秀范例的enjoy相比like会稍好一点。
第4句首先优秀范例说For those people who do not like art at all, they would seldom go to the art museums or music performance center.对比平庸范例The people who are not favorable of the art barely enter the art museums or music performance center.囧了！平庸范例写得更好。那就说说平庸范例为什么写得更好（囧啊！突然感觉逻辑性很差），平庸范例用到了固定搭配be favorable of写得不错（害羞ing），同时barely与seldom也是毫不逊色，因此，这里是平庸范例更好。
最后1句，优秀范例说But if government builds recreational facilities, it benefits all citizens for providing places to exercise.平庸范例反唇相讥However, if government builds recreational facilities, they may give the average people a place to take exercise.显然还是优秀范例的benefit，取本词的动词意思“有益于....”，而不是平时常见的名词意思，显示出用词的灵动性。因而胜出。
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